Want to get this right the first time, as I won't be visiting again soon
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I am visiting a town this weekend and have looked into a location I would like to nominate. I think it is a strong candidate because it is a great place to gather in a building that is on the historical registry, but because I won't be back to the town for quite some time, I would like to submit the best nomination possible.
Title: Evvy's Coffeehouse
Photos: (obviously I don't have anything yet, but because it's a local business, it should be a straightforward photo, similar to the one in the ABC news article linked in supporting info)
Description: With a main room, private parlor, and back patio, Evvy's Coffeehouse is a charming place to gather in the community and is owned by a La Porte family. Yoga, open mic, and other events are hosted here. This hyperlocal coffee shop was opened in 2021 and is named for the owners' daughter. What's more, it's housed in a building from 1900, part of the Indiana and Michigan Avenues Historic District.
Supporting info: It is not a private residence, as the house has been turned into a local business. Street view is outdated, so see this news article for address confirmation and more info: https://www.abc57.com/news/evvy-s-coffeehouse-to-open-in-la-porte Info on the historic district registered by the National Park Service: https://www.nps.gov/nr/feature/places/14000807.htm
I wanted to link directly to the NPS PDF that lists the exact address, but unfortunately their PDFs seem to be down right now.
Related question: I've been on a hiatus, so not sure if something as changed. Are updates still applied automatically? I nominated three sites today, and only one got an update applied (I had three updates in storage). I'm wondering because the coffeehouse doesn't officially open for a few weeks, so as to not hurt the nomination's chances, I was planning on letting it sit in queue for a little and applying an upgrade in a few weeks.
Any constructive feedback is appreciated!
Comments
Seeing as its not even open for business yet claiming that its a hyperlocal coffe house and a charming place to gather, are just lies. You can't know this until its been open for a few months.
Sorry but your using keywords to try and claim its a good place, when its not even started trading yet.
Your description reads more as an advertisement rather than describing the place, theres a fine line between being descriptive and just being a marketing advert, and for me your description creeps over into being an advert more than giving me information on it.
How is it a lie? It's a place specifically designed to gather, the interior is well decorated, and on social media, local residents have expressed excitement to visit. It's local because it's an independent business unique to the area owned and operated by people who live in the town.
What information would be good to add? (I was going to add the architectural style of the building, but I can't remember it and the NPS website that lists it is partly down right now.)
As I mentioned, I would like to "delay" this nomination by letting it sit in queue for a while before I apply an upgrade.
Its a lie because you're making claims on it being something now, when its not anything at all at present.
It may be designed to be a place to gather, but until its open you can't claim that its a gathering spot.
As a different analogy imagine you have an old oak tree, you cant then claim you have this amazing oak wodden table, you just haven't had it made from the tree yet.
It may well turn into a good gathering spot, and a hyperlocal coffee house, but you can't claim its either of these things yet if its not even open for business for a few more weeks.
For all you know it could be a firefly business and open and shut within months. Unlikely but still a possibility.
You can't make a submission on the potential of what it may be, it needs to be something already.
As to delaying, theres no way to artificially delay a submission.
I would also suggest that a few weeks isnt likely to be sufficiently long enough either. Unless it gets massive local press interest and rave reviews, its going to be to new to claim its important and of great interest to the community.
I'm not trying to kick the submission down, I love a good local business submission and usually happily give them great ratings.
But this one just can't be rated as a good local business until its at least started trading and been open for a while to ensure its got the locals interest.
I don't think it's bad! It might be great. My opinion...
Drop the word "hyperlocal" - it does sound like trying to manipulate reviewers. Don't give the owner's name - sounds like a callout. You can't say events ARE held there at this moment - but that was too much salesmanlike info anyway.
"With a main room, private parlor, and back patio, Evvy's Coffeehouse is a charming place to gather in the community. Located in a building from 1900, part of the Indiana and Michigan Avenues Historic District."
For the Supporting, drop "It is not a private residence". Sounds like you're begging, and maybe "up to something". (Plus, it's poor persuasive writing, to start with a negative.) Just say "This former house has been turned into a local business..."