この投稿は削除されました
This looks interesting. Is it possible to share more detail like submission / surroundingphoto, supporting information, and its location?
1 Like
Hi @Ryou00206
Welcome to the forum 
Beauty salons are one of the hardest sells as they’re often ‘generic businesses’.
But let us have a look at yours as @TjoeMi suggested.
The community here is very good in giving feedback how to improve a nomination or why you probablly should let it go and look for better candidates.
4 Likes
Hello @Ryou00206
I don’t think this photo does much to highlight your salon nomination. I do see a very small sign in the midst of parking and the side of a building. I’m guessing the sign is for the beauty salon?
Typically I’d think the sign at the main entrance would be a stronger main photo. I wouldn’t be surprised if the Machine Learning (ML) rejected this as there is no main focus.
Do you have other photos of the business?
1 Like
Wait did u mention that the interior is decorated with mural? Sometimes its easier to submit those art inside instead of the business itself because generic business issue
1 Like
I believe its easier. Salon in general is generic business. You will nd to explain a lot in order to convince reviewer that its unique local gathering spot. Art or playground inside it however is a different issue. But u nd to proof its location. You can use collage to combine 2-3 photo in supporting photo if u want to show more photo from different angle
Its ur call
@Ryou00206
I have read the entire text of the description and reasons for the recommendation. My advice is that you should emphasize the management philosophy and concept of that beauty salon and show that you meet the eligibility criteria for both exploration and socializing. Also, the description and reasons for recommendation are redundant. The same thing is repeated in both the description and the reasons for recommendation, and the same thing is stated over and over again in both of them combined. Please polish your text and make it as short as possible. If it is too long, the judges will get tired and stop reading to the end. Then mention some points and ask questions. Please forgive us if we include some negative comments.
- Beauty salons are generally places to get your hair done for grooming and to enjoy fashion, not places to go with family and friends to have fun. Why do you claim that it creates intergenerational interaction?
- The “semi-private seat” is a unique service. Are there any other unique services this hair salon offers?
- What is the reason why it was featured in the local government’s PR magazine and visited by the mayor? Is there a reason for the appeal?
- You say that local artists’ works are exhibited, but is this because it is provided as a place for artists to showcase their works? Or are they purchased by the beauty salon and used as interior decorations?
- You mention that the store uses locally produced building materials, but has it received any awards from the local government or local organizations for doing so?
2 Likes
Before you do, think about the five questions. There may be additional points there that will appeal to you. I read the entire document and basically felt that much of what you wrote in the reasons for your recommendation could be removed from the explanation.
In particular, the years in business should be moved to the reasons for recommendation since the business has been in operation for less than two years. The description mentions intergenerational interaction twice, so you may want to delete one or the other. In addition, the community contributions of “coming-of-age ceremony” dressing and “Children’s Safe House” are not appealing points, as these services are also available at general beauty salons. In addition to semi-private seating, the company is promoting its “super-concentrated hydrogen treatment,” which should also be added to the description. If it is a place for local artists to present their works, this should also be added to the appeal. The point about the restaurant being an economic and cultural center for the region is unnecessary if the above description is sufficient to convey the message.
2 Likes
As the original poster has chosen to delete their contributions I am closing this topic.