@Ryou00206
I have read the entire text of the description and reasons for the recommendation. My advice is that you should emphasize the management philosophy and concept of that beauty salon and show that you meet the eligibility criteria for both exploration and socializing. Also, the description and reasons for recommendation are redundant. The same thing is repeated in both the description and the reasons for recommendation, and the same thing is stated over and over again in both of them combined. Please polish your text and make it as short as possible. If it is too long, the judges will get tired and stop reading to the end. Then mention some points and ask questions. Please forgive us if we include some negative comments.
- Beauty salons are generally places to get your hair done for grooming and to enjoy fashion, not places to go with family and friends to have fun. Why do you claim that it creates intergenerational interaction?
- The “semi-private seat” is a unique service. Are there any other unique services this hair salon offers?
- What is the reason why it was featured in the local government’s PR magazine and visited by the mayor? Is there a reason for the appeal?
- You say that local artists’ works are exhibited, but is this because it is provided as a place for artists to showcase their works? Or are they purchased by the beauty salon and used as interior decorations?
- You mention that the store uses locally produced building materials, but has it received any awards from the local government or local organizations for doing so?