Before you do, think about the five questions. There may be additional points there that will appeal to you. I read the entire document and basically felt that much of what you wrote in the reasons for your recommendation could be removed from the explanation.
In particular, the years in business should be moved to the reasons for recommendation since the business has been in operation for less than two years. The description mentions intergenerational interaction twice, so you may want to delete one or the other. In addition, the community contributions of “coming-of-age ceremony” dressing and “Children’s Safe House” are not appealing points, as these services are also available at general beauty salons. In addition to semi-private seating, the company is promoting its “super-concentrated hydrogen treatment,” which should also be added to the description. If it is a place for local artists to present their works, this should also be added to the appeal. The point about the restaurant being an economic and cultural center for the region is unnecessary if the above description is sufficient to convey the message.
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