I would revise the reasoning and focus on what is being submitted. It should be conveyed that the point of interest itself is the driving factor for being a great place for socialization/exploration. Mentioning other POIs feel like the interest is not on the submitted shop but rather it being there on happenstance.
The above highlights the importance of good supporting evidence to better identify an acceptable business.
It may further help to post the nomination as presented during voting like previously asked.